Thursday, October 1, 2020

#FallWritingFrenzy

I have been writing during this crazy time, just not on the blog BUT something inspired me greatly, so I decided to post it here.


I adore Autumn and Kaitlyn Sancheze @kaitlynlean17 has given me a chance to really adore it more.  This story is inspired by this image-



Here it is The Gift, it's only 197 words, 3 under the 200 limit! It highlights #DIS in a beautifully positive way and is deliciously autumnal!

THE GIFT

     Sam uncoiled his glee and let his four legs spring leaps and bounds over the crisp snap and crackle of the ground.  With his work vest off, he was ready to play.  Nothing, not the mud in the in-between with its slips and slides, or the smell of treats from Sarah's pocket could stop him from exploding into the freshly raked pile of waiting leaves.

     All he needed was a...

    "Go!"
    Then, down the ramp, bounding in a wingless flight, Sam sprung feet first PLUNGE...CRASH...CRUNCH.

    Waves of gold and crimson leaves burst into the damp gray afternoon air, alive with Sarah's laughter-fireworks of joy-cheering Sam into wilder wiggles and squiggles.  Blissfully burrowing deeper into the rainbow of fallen leaves Sam let autumn gobble him whole, until...

    "Sam!"

    Then, up and out, Sam sprang onto the rise of the ramp, bringing with him treasures-broken bits and pieces of summer now dressed in rain and frost-for Sarah's senses to devour.  Pressing into the large wheel of Sarah's chair Sam rested his chin on her armrest and waited while she hungrily explored the puzzle of textures and delicious scents buried in his fur.

    A gift.

    Sam waited, until...

    "Go!"




13 comments:

  1. I love this story! Well done, Laura! I, too, entered a submission for the same image. Alas, my website is not yet active so I posted in the comments. But I don't think mine is as beautiful as yours! I can "see" Sam and Sarah so alive in your story!

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    1. grrr... not sure why it's not posting with my name and as "Unknown" -- but I'm Patricia J. Franz. @patriciajfranz1 on twitter and patriciajfranz on Instagram.

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    2. Awwwww Thank you Patrica. I will go check out your story on Twitter. I am sure it is beautiful.

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  2. I love the energy and fun of this piece. I enjoyed reading it!

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  3. I could feel it as well as I could see it! Nice job:) Colleen Dougherty

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  4. Love the inclusiveness of the piece, and the integration of the senses. So creative and lovely! Good luck, Laura!

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  5. I love the imagery. It's practically like I'm there. Great work :)

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  6. Such a wondrously playful piece with witty and inventive wordplay. My favorites are "wingless flight," a wonderful allusion to seasonal migration, and "Sam let autumn gobble him whole," a wonderful nod to turkeys and Thanksgiving. It is amazing how you developed two such distinct and individual characters in so few words. I greatly enjoyed Sam and Sarah's camaraderie and their different but complementary personalities, Sam's boundless energy contrasting with Sarah's quiet contemplation of the treasures he collected. @AnneLipton

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  7. Love this! My daughter (who is in college)trains service dogs. I was completely envisioning her current trainee, MacGregor while reading this. It shows both the joy of the dog and his person. :) Well done

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    1. Thank you for sharing this with me. Thank your daughter for her energy and great work. What a wonderful gift she is giving. I am thrilled you enjoyed reading my story.

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  8. LOVE this story!!!! I can imagine the gorgeous illustrations for it. Hope this becomes a PB, as my students would love it too.

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    1. Awwww, I can SEE it too. Fingers crossed. Thank you for your kind words.

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  9. Thanks for sharing your sweet story with us for the Fall Writing Frenzy! Sincerely, Kaitlyn Sanchez

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